I would change quite a lot, I admit. I cannot say if it would be for the best, in the end, but I would try.
[Smiling softly, he muses:] You speak of Shakespeare, but you would like his contemporary, Marlowe. He wrote a play about a king and the man he loved, once. A shame it did not gain the prestige that Romeo did.
[action] Time to be super-meta
[Smiling softly, he muses:] You speak of Shakespeare, but you would like his contemporary, Marlowe. He wrote a play about a king and the man he loved, once. A shame it did not gain the prestige that Romeo did.